The Almost Escape
Fiddling with my pencil, I sat there, waiting for the clock to strike two. Melissa and I were going to meet in the school bathroom. Finally, we're in the clear and out of class. Silently, we walked toward the main school doors. Pressing the wheelchair button, the door opened and there it was. Well I guess I shouldn't call her an 'it'. Mrs. June, the principle, stood right in front of us.
"So...you girls going somewhere?"
"Well...um...uh," Melissa stammered.
"To the office you go! Wait until your parents hear that you girls were sneaking out of class!"
"Thanks a lot Mrs. June," we murmured.
Well written. Great job with your punctuation. I also like your word choice stammered and murmured. A challenge for you in the future is to have a story with a big idea or message. This might mean writing more than 100 words but then revising it down to 100 words. An example might be some of the picture books we read with important messages for the readers to take away.
ReplyDeleteWell written. Great job with your punctuation. I also like your word choice stammered and murmured. A challenge for you in the future is to have a story with a big idea or message. This might mean writing more than 100 words but then revising it down to 100 words. An example might be some of the picture books we read with important messages for the readers to take away.
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